Final project Post and self critique

Here is my Final project film.

I know this piece isn't perfect, but I still think I did well on it. I did better than I thought on the lip syncing. I know the choice of using my own voice may not have been the best idea, but I really wanted to try it and see if I could get myself to sound at least like a girly or flaky kind of guy. I know there are a few little mistakes too, but I still think I did a decent job.

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New logline:

After getting stuffed in a locker by bullies, a high school girl leaps out with a vengeance and a stun gun in hand.

New and revised storyboard images.

Storyboard images for Final Project

Aesthetic choices

Here are three examples of the effects I'd like to use for my final animation.

Using the lightning effect to create the effect of the main character shooting lightning from her eyes.

Using the Scatterize effect to disintegrate an object, or even a character.

Using the beam effect to create lasers.

Final Project Intent and Structure Analysis

Intent

I would like to give the audience the ideas of two things. The first being that sometimes when dealing with tough stuff, it's nice to daydream once in a while and escape because that can help one relax. The second idea being that sometimes people can gain interesting ideas from daydreaming or just dreams in general.

Structure Analysis

First scene: The girl receives her homework from her teacher. The girl doesn't know what to do on it.

Second scene: As she's leaving school, a few bullies run into the girl. She tries to just talk her way out, but they start to mess with her, particularly throwing junk at her, like trash and even bits of food. She turns and just runs off for home.

Third scene: The girl finally makes it home, tired and frustrated, and sits at her desk in her room. She passes out on her desk and starts dreaming.

Fourth Scene: The girl is back at the scene with the bullies. This time though when they start throwing things at her, she shoots down the junk with laser shots from her fingers. Then she sends lightning shocks from her eyes to one of the bullies and shocks him stiff. Then she turns another one into dust by glaring at him really hard. This sends the last couple of bullies running for it, leaving the girl quite happy.

Fifth Scene: The girl wakes up from her dream and is smiling. She looks at her page and sees what she's required to write about for her homework and then starts writing about what she dreamed about.

Final Project Sentence and Synopsis

Using fantasy to deal with or escape a tough situation, then using it to come up with a good idea.

Synopsis

First we see a scene when the main character, a student in school is given homework from her teacher and at first glance, the girl isn't too sure what she'll do about it. Then we go to a scene where she's leaving school and runs into a couple of bullies who decide to give her a hard time. They throw things at her like trash and even bits of food. The girl just tries to avoid them and continues walking. We then cut to the scene where the girl is at home and reaches her desk and appears tired from what she just went through. She closes her eyes and starts daydreaming. In the dream we see her back at the same time and place of when the bullies started messing with her. But instead of leaving, the girl fights back. She uses lasers to shoot the objects the bullies throw at her, sends lightning to one to make them electrified and even causes one to disintegrate. This sends the bullies running for it, leaving the girl satisfied. Waking up the girl looks at her homework assignment sheet and sees that it says, "If you could go back in time and change any moment of your life in anyway you can, what would you do? Explain your answer in an essay and also include how you would do it and why. Include detail and description. The essay must be no less than 500 words. The girl smiles with an idea in mind and puts down the sheet takes a fresh sheet of paper out of her desk and a pencil and starts working.

Final reworked Midterm