- Change the first fantasy transition. Lose the dissolve and try something more believable.
- Add MUCH more action and drama to the sword fighting. Particularly more movement in both warriors bodies and not just their arms and swords.
- Add a scene where the warrior girl looks like the boss warrior has her on the ropes.
- Fix the movements of the worker girl when she's moving across her desk to take the sheet of paper. Don't make it look like she's levitating.
- Don't make the scene where the employee is reaching for the paper sheet too long.
Other necessary or greatly suggested adjustments
- Give the boss warrior a happy, but evil expression and an embarrassed expression.
- Adjust the boss warrior with layers where his pants can fall down and reveal humorous undershorts.(White with big red hearts is the first choice.)
- Give the warrior girl a scared look again.
- Put the warrior girl into a position where she can launch a surprise attack. Perhaps behind the tree and let her leap out and attack
- Add a red apple to the employee's desk and let her poke at it with her letter opener.
- Let the employee play with the letter opener longer.
- Cut to black at the end of the animation.
- Add a title scene at the beginning of the animation.
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